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Post by Dakota on Oct 29, 2005 18:58:56 GMT -5
Not shure if this is the right place for this.
I'm Creating a story Called Star Wars: Tadak's Rebellion. It is about an orphan boy who happens to be the ruler of the planet Tadak. It takes place about 13 years after Episode III
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Post by aric on Nov 5, 2005 6:07:34 GMT -5
Not shure if this is the right place for this. Yup, this is the right place. I'm Creating a story Called Star Wars: Tadak's Rebellion. It is about an orphan boy who happens to be the ruler of the planet Tadak. It takes place about 13 years after Episode III Please send feedback! Okay, now that you gave the basic background, what are you planning to do with it? Are you going to have Tadak rebel against the new Empire? BTW, Episode IV happens about nineteen or twenty years after Episode III. According to the opening crawl of Episode IV, the rebels win their FIRST victory against the Empire when they are able to steal the plans to the Death Star. Of course, I'm talking about the Rebel Alliance. You might choose not to affiliate yourself with them and go it alone against the Empire. It probably wouldn't be agood idea to openly rebel, though. The Empire has a lot of ships. And when they can locate a hot spot, like your planet, they'll stomp out resistance very quickly. If I were you, I would write a story revolving around subterfuge and spying and stuff like that. Of course, there would be the occasionaly space battles (after all, this is "Star Wars"), but it would be more about political and intelligence maneuvering. Of course, this is your story. You can write it any way you want. - Aric
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Post by Dakota on Nov 6, 2005 13:19:26 GMT -5
Thats mainly my story line. Tadak does rebel towrds the middle. And there is a HUGE twist With the Emperor and the prince. You will have to wait and read to find that out ;D I'm going to finish the first chapter today. it's not much, (more like a prolouge thing ) Dakota
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Post by Dakota on Nov 6, 2005 18:00:09 GMT -5
Chapter 1
Japir Sat in the Galactic Senate Building. Bored to death. He had just addressed the Emperor. His planet was starving, the Empire had many mining facilities on Tadak. Almost all natural food sources were owned by the empire and mostly destroyed by their mines He told him that the rumors of a rebellion sounded better and better. The Emperoe finally agreed to remove most of the mines.
Japir was the King of Tadak. When he was young his parents were killed when their ship was bombed. So Japir inherited the planet and became king. Now he is 14 and a wise leader.
The counsel was finally over and he was heading to the office of senator Organa, an old family friend. He was there with him when his parents were killed. It was an image burned into his mind. When he arrived his secretary told him he was having a meeting but it would be over shortly if he would like to wait. He sat down on a bench and picked up a Halo Net screen.
The Queen of the peaceful planet of Naboo was found Plotting agianst the Empire. She won't tell who else is with her but she is being held captive until she confesses
The door to Senator Organa's office opened and out walked some Senators some of which he recognized "Senator Mon Mothma." "Hello your highness"
Japir walked in Organa's office Senator was shutting off a display screen on his wall on it was a strange space station shaped like a ball the screen went blank before he could see what it was called. "Senator Organa, are you busy?" "Why Japir, it's so good to see you again! come in, come in sit down." "Thank you Senator" "I can't believe what the Emperor is doing to Tadak. It is such a beautiful planet, I'd hate to see it ruined by the Empire" "I know it is so frustrating" "So how long are you here?" "Just a few days, I have to get home soon." "Well it was good seeing you but I have another meting" "It was goods seeing you to. Good bye" "Good bye your highness"
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Post by Azonthus on Nov 6, 2005 22:56:55 GMT -5
Wow, interesting story;) Maybe you could throw in some descriptions of what the rooms look like? Some character description?
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Post by utoraptor3000 on Nov 7, 2005 14:19:18 GMT -5
good idea! it will make it more interesting
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Post by Dakota on Nov 9, 2005 17:03:40 GMT -5
Yeah this is the 1st version i'm gonna re write it soon. i thought of a way to make it better.
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Post by Dakota on Mar 28, 2006 20:26:14 GMT -5
Ok I updated the prologue and chapter 1. Here is chapter two Let me know what you think!
Chapter Two
Japir Arrived at his new appartment. It was rumored to have been owned by an old senator of Naboo, the one supposevly killed by a Jedi named Obi-Wan Kenobi. He had been there for a few minuites when he recived a message from the emperor's office. He was wanted to come see the emperor.
"I just got to my appartment, can't it wait untill morning?" "I'm sorry, The Emperor want's to see you now" "Fine, Fine. I'll be there shortly"
* * * When he arrived he saw a Gungan in a black cloak and hood come out of the Emperor's office. "Was that a lightsaber?" He entered the office "If you pull another stunt like that I'll do to you what I realy did to the Queen of Naboo." "Whats the matter uncle? Scared to loose a planet with only one puny city? You must have such a grand empire" Japir said scarcasticly. I told you never to call me your uncle. It is unforunate enough that your father is my brother" "Your just jellous because my father founded Tadak and became king and you were left a senator. "I'm removing my mines, you think you would be a little nicer. But what else would you expect from, a child" "Just revove your mines and stay out of my life"
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Post by Dakota on Mar 28, 2006 21:56:07 GMT -5
Here is the Gungan
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